abandoment

"What is he doing here" they siad ? A smile turned into a frown. It is nothing but put down,cursing,mugging and whispering. It is like losing a serious baseball game for all your team mates."Dam it jeremy!" The abandonment turns into hatred. It is like a black cloud over you raining. You cant get up. It is like nothing matters to you. Even if some thing exciting happens. It is like the teacher sent you to the corner and every one is laughing at you. It is lonely and dark in the corner there just nothing. But every thing has a light and soon there will be a light.

feeling like an outsider

Sup my name is Jeremy and Im in the 8th grade at Urban Promise Academy. For my expo project in english I have to write an outsiders poem. i haven't went any where for my outsider trip. There was one time I felt like outsider. it is not nice being one. So can you comment my poem